the weird beach!!!!!!!!

Posted on September 30, 2015 by Deleted User
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6 Responses to the weird beach!!!!!!!!

  1. campj says:
    September 30, 2015 at 11:19 am

    You could of made it longer.But great verbs

  2. doumi says:
    October 4, 2015 at 8:01 pm

    Fantastic but as Joelly said you could have made it longer

  3. Anonymous says:
    October 7, 2015 at 11:05 am

    Your work is amazing but it is too short but you can improve

  4. PRECIOUS AND HOLLY.A says:
    October 7, 2015 at 11:07 am

    I liked the way you put in adjectives and detail in your story, great job Shannon!

  5. bryak says:
    October 7, 2015 at 11:25 am

    Great verbs but please make it a bit longer.

  6. garao says:
    October 7, 2015 at 11:27 am

    Its a bit short but I think you could improve it.Good verbs anyways.

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